Four special nuns and a Vicar attempt to go up against the ancient Goddess Tiamat and fail. I think Tiamat really enjoys corrupting clergy.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 4.00
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Just a few mistakes. But I was confused by this sentence.
"Hazel had excused herself to use the restroom and [WHO???] had his arm around Sara's shoulder and cupped her slowly filling breast."
The [who] was blank, or missing. There were a few other points where I got lost in the continuity of the story.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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