The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Babarr
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IBod - A life changing music player
Aaron is chosen to beta test a new kind of music player that stores data in his bodily tissue. Things go awry when some corrupted files make it into the system and change his life forever.

My very first attempt at a story. It's definitely not Pulitzer material and I'm aware of that, so be kind.
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Chris
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This was a fantastic original. The transformation was very creative. I want an Ibod!

TwiTwi
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Cool idea for the plot, great implementation. :)

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