The Overflowing Bra

great story.  need more like this.  

Could use a touchup, some formatting mostly.

It could be improved upon, but it will take some editing. First put it in Word, or open office documents (free!) Break it into paragraphs. 
I liked the sci fi, very original. Personally I don't go for wide asses, but whatever. Starting w/ a B is standard fare in BE. Not far off the mark tho. Good first attempt!

Impossible to read or follow in this format. Split it into paragraphs if you want it to be readable.

Have to agree with the above poster. Mediocre formatting (no line breaks between character speech, etc) can make a story difficult to read, but lack of any paragraph divisions of any kind mean this story is all but unreadable. Just like in English class, presentation is important; it doesn't matter what you have to say if we can't understand it.
If this is just an issue with this particular version or a bizzare uploading problem, you may try viewing the file through several editors (Notepad, Wordpad, Firefox, IE, etc) to insure readability for all viewers. In any case, it should be a relatively simple matter to reformat in a more reader-friendly matter, so don't despair just yet.

Very difficult to get a grip on the story itself. I aborted at about two minutes in. The text formatting (rather, the complete lack of - a simple dash between sentences does not make a dialogue) made it hard to see who says what to whom, the writing in present tense makes it seem like it's more of a script than a text. Was this copied straight from an e-mail, with no regard for paragraphs altogether? Completely broken. Please work on the presentation. Please. Sorry, that's about all I can say.