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When two friends make wishes on a camping trip, the river spirit grants them as best it can... however, being popular can mean many different things.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.00
Pleasure
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Pedantic
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Weary means tired. Wary means cautious.
Genoharden
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
When writing your story, you have to ask "he who?" "Which blonde?"
Other than that, great story!
Vengeance1701
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Great ideas...poor execution. It was difficult to tell who was who in such a short story. Who was important to the story? I couldn't tell. Focus, focus and FOCUS!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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