Been wanting to post a story for a long time. So here it is.
What if you could control what happens to someone with a single question?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.84
- BE: 4.42
- Characters: 4.47
- Technical: 4.21
The Almighty Popo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great idea and great visuals. I was only disappointed that it ended so abruptly. But that's a good thing. And ending that leaves you wanting more is the best kind!
REVXXX
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great story, I am looking forward to the next installment.
vhaen
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Loved the story, I just wish there was more ;)
yezzir
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Awesome story, I hope to see more.
Sahara
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wonderful story. Can't wait to see more!
'Eh Steve!
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great shortie, just the right elements too!.
Perfect length to climax at the end!
Kendra
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I love your story! Please keep writing and post the second chapter soon!
voodoo
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Great!
I'd just establish the protagonist as a male earlier, as until page 4 it's not explicitly mentioned.
Can't wait for more...
halfelf
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Needs some touching up here and there. Overall a good story. I too would like to see some Monster Mamaries. Here's hoping for more!
Jameson
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I agree with the other poster on the addventure thread topic. This would make a great addition to the addventure thread because with the way that this story is set up, there appear to be endless possibilities. With that said, however, please do continue! It's a very enjoyable story.
Yummm
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
My only problem is that you don't have more of these out yet! Love the story so far, keep writing!
Adama
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This would make a great Addventure thread... endless possibilities for transformations. A bit disappointing that there wasn't more mutual transformation in this story, but I imagine the characters will be getting more into experimentation in the next installment, if only to try on different clothing sizes.
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
It's great!!
Please! write more chapters!
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
I enjoyed it so far. Seems a bit odd that if she/he can materialize money out of thin air, then why not materialize clothes, too? But then, that would take away the shopping exoerience, and we _all_ know that women _love_ to shop!! A few points off for not capitalizing the beginning letter of the sentences, and for being apostrophe challenged. And I would've liked to have her/him experiment with Monster Mammaries -- at least for a little while, anyway...
bubblemaniii
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nice. I can't wait for more and hoping even bigger breasts! You're a very good writer as well.
Ringo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Little more dialog would've been nice, but I'm looking forward to seeing more.
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Your a good writer, my only complaint is write more!
Yay
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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