A young girl, often overlooked by others, is given a chance to stand out by her closest freind.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.46
- BE: 3.92
- Characters: 3.92
- Technical: 4.15
killroy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nicely done. I'd like to see her learn to give as well as receive. Taking her rommie's boobs leads me to believe that her BE is becoming an obsession.
MaxPC167
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great story, please continue.
katheb
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
It's done well but i dont really like the idea
Stealing from others seems a selfish way to achive BE and not alny that stealing other atributes .
what do the other women get out of it cept being drained from thier own beauty and they did nothing wrong .
High score on tech
low on others
sorry but that how i feel about this story
Seven
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Nicely done. I hope there's a continuation!
one_eyed_jack
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
not too bad. kind of reminiscent of 'master pc' but quick, down and dirty. need a little tweaking as far as grammar, but this didn't greatly affect my enjoyment of the story. Very good job, overall.
joe
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
just loved it, love you style and it has greatly improved in this story. so good, keep it up, and please writre new stories and soon please. delightful!
jdmramon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I can see a great series coming from this. Keep up the amazing work.
B E Lover
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 1
I liked the story, but I was a bit confused between Kara and Cassie, maybe because of the name similarity. Story was seriously lacking in paragraphs and some punctuation and spelling errors detracted from the overall enjoyment. Would have been nice to see a 'charitable donation.' Ferinstance, she comes across a short, homely, flat-chested girl, and since she has gone way overboard in the tits, beauty and height, she gives some of them to the girl. Just an idea...
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Much improved over your last story.
Adama
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Very nice. Well written. A simple plot, but with fun characters and engagingly written.
Similar to the premise of Morpheus' "The Envy Charm", but the characters are different enough and more appealing...
Wolf
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Very good writing style and story idea, wouldn't mind seeing a little more detail on the growth...
Very good overall!
captainfixit (madmaximum)
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great start. This series has fantastic potential; I especially liked the pheremone attribute.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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