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The Overflowing Bra

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Miracle Grow II
Thank you all (5) for the great words of praise and encouragement.  This is the continuing story with more fantasy scenes than setup.  for all of you who asked, yes there is lactation although not as much as will be in the next few chapters.  Again, I will ask you to send your suggestions.  This file has chapters one and two.  also, at the end, the new character is unnamed.  please send some ideas so that readers can play a part in this story.  they are short so i can probably make one every day or so, but i will need breaks.  Happy reading.
Average Scores:

Sucker4Boobs
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I liked the tentacle rape thing, and as a lactation fan, I was impressed with the green milk.

$!13|\|7
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Overall, the constant musings of the author were entertaining, but the characters seem slightly contrived in their reactions and a few discrepancies do occur. I have read worse, but this could be slightly reworked to up the quality dramatically.

cmdr_mark
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

While I liked part one, the sudden loss of humanity with no transition in part two kind of ruined it for me.

Pythas
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

good story idea, but i didn't like the constant interuptions of the author. it really broke up the flow.

Black Rook
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Brilliant story, could have been a bit longer though. Longer descriptions of the transformation processes would be good. Keep at it.

Cpt.Splorck
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

I must say, these two were a very, very fine read. I honestly enjoyed your cheerful style and I like the overall direction the plot seems to be taking. It's nice that You didn't adamantly hold ground in the realm of overflowing breasts, but adequately expanded to nearby territories of lactation and all-body modification. And as in a real battle, a little tentacle rape is always a small victory.

Personally, I'm a fan of all kinds of body (and mind) transformations, as long as they are lengthy, bountiful and entertaining for both me and the character(s) of the tale. It's so sinfully delicious, how rarely concepts like 'too big' and 'too much' or even 'too many' and 'too wierd' exist in these stories.

I only wish the actual text were a tad longer. I mean, there is nothing better to completely and utterly destroy a good story than pointless and overtaxed and copletely irrelevant and excessively strained and hyperextended and totally unnecessary abundace of thoroughly über-lenghtened adjectives and descriptions, not to mention overuse of too long and flowing sentences (of course, there was also bad grammar & typops), and while a good writer rather makes do with a couple of words fewer than use too many, prose like this really needs descriptions. Descriptions of characters, of surroundings, of paraphernalia, but most importantly, full and arousing descriptions of events and actions. Not too long and cumbersome, but exactly sufficient and up for the occasion. And the lusher and wilder, the better.

Now, I didn't mean to imply that the two stories in question were seriously lacking in these departments, that would be untrue. They managed to get the point across well and were thus rather.. um.. stimulating. They also had that special charm that separates good from the medicore and the text was well flowing and smooth to read. However, they seemed a bit unpolished, not completely finished. And short. But that's nitpicking. After all, as You said, this is still a work in progress, and if these really were a product of just a few nights, then IMHO they are a really admirable accomplishment - I indeed wish I could do it that well!

So thanks for providing us with some quality entertainment and good luck writing more!

(As for the name for she-who-once-was-Jessica, I'd like to nominate Leana - a name nice sounding and also bearing resemblance to 'liana' - so it shoud fit the theme;)

D
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Amusing writing style, good concept but it moves too fast. A little more detail of the interesting parts would help.

Lecks
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

please for the love of everything sexual put in some inflation

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