(Got done with some stuff early, so I decided I would write another part to my story.)
When Ally and Sean go on a trip with some friends, truths are revealed and water is spilled. Get ready for an adventure as Brent and Jenny are introduced to a Watery Fate.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.38
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.13
- Technical: 3.63
Not Me
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
If you still check your ratings after all this time:
Not only was your first story good, but you've shown some great improvements on this one. It's going well, and I hope you do come back and write more something!
Genoharden
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very Enjoyable.
Only Complaint Is That You Use "a bit" A Bit Too Much.
BE lover
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
TheFwank
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Needs a little work on the technical side, but an enjoyable story nonetheless. Keep at it!
Weirdo
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Lovely :D
Keep them coming!
JBird
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Felt like the first story. Still, I'd like to see more.
Deia
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Keep up the great work!
I really love your story, it's been the best in a long time! :D
Dr Know
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Even better than the last, Var! Keep up the amazing work my friend, i find you stories shot, sweet, and rediculously addicting, be the good friend Var, and supply us with more of this miracle drug!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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