The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Bill Pratt
Ed: Chapter 9
Worlds collide as Ed finally gets a few clues as to what is going on, gets an unwanted sex slave, and gets busy.
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cmdr_mark
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Not sure why, but I kind of liked it when Zofia and Audry were "evil twins", it leant their rivalry a bit of fun and a bit of humor to their slowly growing friendship that people kept thinking they were sisters.

Miranda
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

This is a fun read. It keeps me waiting for the next installment. Hurry please.......now would be a good time.

Mopey
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Goodness, gracious! Just when you think Mr. Pratt can't get more inventive, he out-does himself.
I like the multiple dream Ed has to try and "fix" things again. I wonder, since he is forcing himself into being able to pay attention to multiple things in a dream, if he will be able to sub-divide his consciousness back in "real life"?
That way he could finish his graduate degree and take care of his harem at the same time.
Way to go, I eagerly await more chapters.

ChaseV
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

You are amazing! Please keep writing!

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