This is my first attempt at writing a story, I didnt' want to write a full story until I get some commentary on my writing style and idea for a story. This is just the intro, but tell me what you think guys.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.14
- BE: 1.50
- Characters: 3.09
- Technical: 3.77
Very Free
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I haven't read the story yet (please post it in a user friendly format such as .txt or .rtf). But I wanted to comment on story fragments. If you haven't finished it yet, don't expect to get anything but poor ratings, if any ratings at all. I don't think it's appropriate to waste the readers' time with an incomplete tale. An epilogue that has some conclusion would be a bit more acceptable.
George
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Mr. B
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Catfish
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Looking forward to seeing where this is going, since there are (obviously) a lot of possibilities -- I hope it continues!
Re my ratings: BE Description really deserves a "not applicable," since I know this is just the introduction, but that's unfortunately not an option.
Quadhouse
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
puzzler
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
can't wait for the next part
Vladimir
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Deffinatly continue writing. This story has a lot of potnetial. I am looking forward to the next installment.
dude
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
thats it? please continue
Toymaker
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Interesting premise, not really much to rate. I'd like to see the rest of it when it's done.
Cuervo
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
looking forward to the next installment
beliskner_thor
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
your writing style is great and you have good english not to mention the story has tons of potential to be really good
cant wait to see the entire thing
Myhnegon
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Really looking forward to more, great stuff.
MrHHH
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
I'll leave this up for now. But if I get the feeling that you have no intention of finishing this, I'll have to remove it. The upload page says, in big bold letters, "Stories that have no BE in the will be deleted."
Mopey
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Orrin: You may not want to post MS Word files, as they have meta-data about the author that you may not want made public.
Try HTML files, everyone can read those; or try publishing to PDF, you can get an open source utility called PDF Creator here: sourceforge.net/projects/pdfcreator/
Anonymous
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Not much here to enjoy, no BE, and the character is flat at this point. A few notes on grammar: "Every time dialogue shifts, it's a newline."
"That simple?" my associate asked.
"Yep." I replied. "The butler did it."
fillerbunee2
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Sounds like a fun premise, i'd be interested to see more of the story
BIGTittylova
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
GOOD...cant wait to see where this is going to end up
Jumba Jookiba
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
For once I was able to open a document file and find the grammar to be correct. Obviously there is no key BE yet however with unlimited wishes I doubt that will remain.
I highly suggest moving this piece along. It seems like your writing skill is quite to my taste and you have an open concept to toy with. Get to the keyboard my friend and finish what you have started
dividedinterests
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 5
Can't wait to see whatelse you have?
Big D
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
You need to continue the story. It was just starting to get good, when you put in the 3 most famous words... To Be Continued. LOL
GenericName
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Repost in a format that isn't MS Word, preferrably HTML or .TXT if nothing else.
GenericNickname
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Please post in an open format (PDF, HTML, plaintext, etc.), not a proprietary format (Word, OpenXML, XPS, etc.).
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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