A tale of an Irish boy, who's mother passes on a family secret. A penny that allows the holder to transform theirs and others appearances! My first BE story, be gentle! Part 1 of 2
Perfect.... and then it cuts. And there's never been any more. Total cock tease.
I can't wait for the second part!
I really liked this story i cant wait for part two...ddo you write any other fiction?
Damn! This story is fantastic. One of the best in the last few months. Keep writing!
You sir, are a dirty teasing bastard. Hope the second part comes soon!
nice and wel written story
now go on with part 2 :P
Please dear GOD don't make us wait too long on the next installment, this is one of the better stories posted here in a long time
Fantastic!
Very good story, I was surprised by it's quality and I was caught off guard when suddenly it just ended. Please, post part II asap. Can't wait to read what happens next.
Very nice story, especially for a first-timer ;) Can't wait for Part 2!
Cute story, very good start, look forward to part two.
Finally a new story. And it's a really good one too. Keep up the great work :D
Excellent story, please hurry with part two.
Nice story start. Please continue.
Very well written, I am very impressed at this story please do not hesitate to upload the next installment ASAP.
This has nothing to do with the quality of the story, which was quite good- some more whitespace in your webpage formatting between paragraphs would greatly improve readability.
Awsome, cant wait for part 2, please continue with this story and write some more!
An excellent story, my only comment would be the things in parenthesis I found somewhat distracting from the flow of the narative.
Not bad; can't wait for more.
The only negative thing I can say about it is that it ended. I look forward to the next installment if you continue.
I like this story. I wish I had a magic penny. I hope the next chapter come soon!
Excellent story, high marks all around. I can't wait for the next installment.
Excellent spelling, grammar, formatting... Great character development, great descriptions, and damn, you're a tease for ending the story there! THANK YOU for not doing incest!! Like one of the other comments says, the parts in parenthesis are a little distracting, and that's honestly my only negative comment about your story. Can't wait for part 2 (and 3 and 4....) Keep up the good work!
It was well-described an interesting, and it narrowly avoided a shockingly casual incest scene. But the breaking of the fourth wall is fitting enough for such a comedic story.
i would just like to clarify I am totally NOT into incest, that is just how the story panned out when i was writing it. There was really no planning in this story, it was all on the spot writing really.
But glad you guys like it :D
excellent writing! Keep up the good work. I cant wait to read the next installment so hurry!
Grat start, makings of a great story here, but only if you continue it, as it stands if you don't continue it will be too short, and won't have much re-readability so to speak. But still excellent start can't wait to have more
Super start! I can't wait to see him in action with is g/f!
Over all loved it :) ...can not wate for your part 2*winks*
BE I did like the way you did the mother adn the son was intising as I do Insect story's from time to time :P
Characters: WEll..not so hot Dont get me rong is was a grate pice of work over all..gess we hopeing for a little more from the mother & sos *grins*
Tech Q :you did have a few run on sentites. but not to the point of degrading the Be in the story...cant wate for the part 2. Hope I see soem pregnancy in the next one :p mother or the newgirl friend ..
*(( sry all for my tyop's it hard to type or right for that mater when you have Deslixca :(( it huntes me and keeps me from puting my story out :(/ ))**
Good stuff. If its your first atempt its great. If not its just well above average. I like how you played with the idea of incest with out actualy going there. Its an interesting way of dealing with two obviously sexualy trasformed people that makes them realistic, human, and still likeable.
Whens the sequel coming?
I hope this doesn't turn into yet another unfinished story.
Great story, can't wait to read more for this story. There is going to be more right?
Come on, I want to read more! Can't wait for 2nd & more parts!!!
I would have liked to see the Mother on Son interaction continue but it's your story so whatever floats your boat.
good stuff.
Great beginning, Very descriptive. Hopefully this is the start of a awesome new series.
Keep up the great work.
Yes, that's it!
The only possible complaint that anyone can have is that there isn't enough action, but I expect that to change in the second part. I wait eagerly in expectation.