My first attempt. Two magic users meddle with the affairs of two doctors and three of their patients, AND GET BURNNED!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.67
- BE: 1.83
- Characters: 1.83
- Technical: 2.00
Soy
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
It just plain stinks, for example: it says it has Multi in it but there is none.
goatman
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Okay for a first attempt. The characters were a bit shallow with no real characteristics to make them likeable or otherwise. Keep on writing
ApesMa
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Fun to read; thanks. The crusty old gent who enforces justice at the end makes the story. A correction to the Spanish: "The Brotherhood of the Black Scorpion" would be "La Hermandad del Alacrán Negro."
thefwank
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Honestly quite pathetic. The writing is shoddy, the dialogue is canned, the narration is ridiculously scattered- for gosh sakes, you couldn't even be bothered to end the last sentance with a period.
Why on earth does this crap get put on here?
bigbadwolf
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
It was technically good, but content was utterly uninspiring. You should try to elaborate what happens, and just not blurt out something like "her breasts expanded to size D."
Garbo
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Awful. You even screwed up the description; you mispelled "burned" and your capslock got stuck.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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