The Overflowing Bra

I'm not sure there was any BE.  Unfortunately, "Contunes where the first story left off." is a representation of the spelling and grammar in the entire piece.  I would like to see this story spell-checked and re-structured grammatically.

First of all, it does not continue from where the first story left off - not even close. And second, here's the entire story: "First she was average looking. Then this happened. And then that happened. But then something else happened. Now she's 8'2" and has 48G breasts." It seemed like more of an outline to an idea than an actual story. Practically no descriptions of... well, anything. Terrible dialogue, from characters that seemed to lack both a personality and an IQ. Finally, half of the necessary punctuation was missing. I read the whole thing only out of courtesy, and quite frankly, I'm completely uninterested in the third installment that you claim you're going to write. (Cliffhangers are supposed to make me think "I can't wait to see what happens," not "Who gives a shit what happens?")

This story should not even be in this archive. It feels more like an 8th grade outline than an actually story. 

Hey you tried, I'll give you that much.  But if English is your first language how do you comunicate with others? If English is a second or third take more classes. Now the characters are flat the dialog is choppy and boring and details are non exsistant. On top of that someone 6'2" 280 pounds is playing Dline in football no way does he play soccer