Day 2. James discovers more about his powers.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.86
- BE: 3.71
- Characters: 3.57
- Technical: 3.29
Odalisque
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
It's a good story, thing get a little on the weird side for my tastes, but it's still quite enjoyable.
SoylentOrange
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Not the most technically competent piece, but the premise is interesting. You'd better come up for a magic pouch or something for the main character, because there's no way he could walk around school looking like he's smuggling half a deli counter's worth of meat in his pants and not cause a commotion. Can't wait to see that sleepover, though.
Halfelf
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Nice stuff. Keep up the good work. As you keep writing it will just keep getting better. Thanks for the story.
DarkHeart
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Fun sequel, your writing is definitely improving even if the style still seems a bit off. Could have used a little more BE description, and you needed to make up your mind whether Ming was Japanese or Chinese.
Oni
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
heh, she had better be Japanese since an Oni is from Japanese Myth.
cmdr_mark@hotpop.com
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Your writing is getting better. However, it could definetly use a bit more polish. Also, the story could use more description, I wasn't even really sure what Ming looked like other than at one point the main character looks up and mentions she has A-cups.
Vicious
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Really liked the story hurry up and make the next one
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