tsunami@xs4all.nl
Peter finds out that Halloween can be VERY special
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.17
- Characters: 3.33
- Technical: 3.33
theman
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
kind of cliched, nothing too special, but certainly enjoyable.
Speed.
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Nice, liked it a lot. Could be a start for a nice setting overall.
deux_anges
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Short and sweet! I liked the descriptions of the vamp. I hope you write a sequel.
DarkHeart
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Not bad, overly cliched as some have said and to be honest the breast growth seemed like an afterthought.
cakefart
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I made a fudgie in my pants.
Dinner
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
When I saw the Halloween title, I was excited to see what you had in store for us. I was, however, rather disappointed in your lack of logic; I believe that the discussion on the forums would describe this best as "unexplained magical influence." It just didn't make any sense to me why a vampire would have such intense magical powers. Also, it doesn't make much sense to me that a vampire would have difficulty having an orgasm in so long, considering their mesmeric capabilities and abnormal strength. You didn't develop the vampire with any feral instinct--the way you described that a vampire cannot take a life on October 31st would automatically make me assume that she would be fighting with herself on a very painful level. It was incredibly short, and not getting to know the characters made this story a quick and rather bland read. I liked how you described his initial sight of the vampiress, but other than that, you lack any real semblance of detail. Aside from the brevity of this piece, nothing else really sticks in my mind.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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