Keiji Itoh has inherited her father's emerald brooch. When she turns sixteen, she discovers it can grant her every desire. (Any other fic I submit that uses the names in this one are unaffiliated, save from their source. These are parallel occurrences, if you can call them that.)
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I was going to mention that it jumped into the transformation a bit too quickly, but you already covered that. Your style is unique and we could always use more stories written in first person (from the girl's point of view, that is).
You have some great transformation descriptions, if anything I'd say you could add in a little more description about what she's feeling. Giantess isn't really my thing, but the descriptions were definetly fleshed out well enough. We could use a little more character development, it'd be great to get to know the characters a little better.
Overall, great job, please continue writing. I would love to see your takes on some of the other types of transformations, and some more BE focus. I look forward to your future submissions.
The story is so-so, but the ATROCIOUS html formatting makes the damn thing unreadable.
It wasn't bad, instead of having the intro like you did, try and work it into the story in such a way that we care about what happens with the chars. Also please kill that design in your html, it makes reading the story very difficult.
What I don't get is the age... what's with people here and their desire for girls under 18? I mean the story wouldn't of been affected at all if the girl was 2 years older :S
Having skipped the html version, I can't comment on the formatting that other people did. However, I did rather enjoy the story. I find many fetish stories go out of thier way to make some sort of novella out of a very simple premise, device and execution. It's not a slam to other authors.. but I don't often taken time to read any story clocking in over 80k. The lack of backstory actually helped the flow quite a bit and thankfully didn't nitter over unimportant details. Though I enjoy third person narrative best, first person in the woman's view is a rare and enjoyable read.. I dislike being in the position of someone else's dick fawning over the breasts of focus. And for what it's worth.. I do like giantesses, and don't mind underage characters. Goodness knows the very root of breast expansion is in puberty, the 'pre-legal' years.. anyone with moral hangups is barking up the wrong fetish.
I thought it was a very god story, i enjoy it when its from the females point of view. I dissage with the age comment made by Child Rights and Services as in the uk age 16 is legal?
http://www.ageofconsent.com/ <--- as you can see 16 or younger is legal in many countrys :P and I have to agree with Phantom's last comment about pubrity and girl under 18. after a while the whole Late Bloomer card gets old in BE fiction. The Giantess thing, just is normaly not my cup of tea, I've never dated a woman over 5'6" :P
Really enjoyed this one, descriptions were pretty good. 2 on the technical because of the horrible HTML background and font. No need to make it fancy. And I also have no problem with the age thing. I find nothing wrong with people fantasizing about the "highschool" age-group. And even so, these are fictional characters, and so they can't get hurt and/or emotionally damaged. And besides, most of these stories I find involving teens are ONLY about teens - it's mostly irresponsable kids. You find that in movies all the time (American Pie?), so what's the big deal?
Well, having read many of your other works, I have to say this one was sub-par in terms of what I've seen you do, that's why I give all the 'average' ratings. However, grammatically it's one of the better ones, so you get props there.
As usual you have a strange and perverse creativity in many of your works, which comes out en masse whenever you write these fetish stories. Sometimes I think you have little 'too' much fun writing them, and the tale moves with quick but descriptive flow typical of 'stream of consciousness' type writing that has been edited slightly afterwards. I'm curious to know how you work the writing process.
Having seen the Takeru and Keiji from your other works, I feel that these two were underdeveloped. Even minus the back-story, if you were to take any of the later chapters of ‘RoseIII’ your characters seemed to have a greater vivacity than was present here. Rather than your usual ‘round’ characters these were very bland. They represented fetishes and roles that you’ve had many of your characters juggle, but rather than having a character put on a mantle you turn the mantle into a full-fledged character. This only fails in the sense that a mantle is just that: a mantle. Without a ‘real’ character to wear it the mantle becomes a vacant space.
So overall, the story was well-written, but the poor characters dragged down my enjoyment. Keep up the good work, you’re always improving.