The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Anonymous
TheClause2007@yahoo.com
Synergy
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Average Scores:

anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Whaddya think?

.
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

good start, but then it was wrapped up too fast, with not much description of what was going on not bad as a parody, not great as a straight story

Bill Pratt
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Overall

Funny, but needs editing.


BE

They get big, but it just happens. No real description.


Characters

Not enough material to get a good read on the characters.


Technical

Given the number of spell checking tools available, there is no excuse for misspelled words. Otherwise you are getting up close to 4


Goofy tone, I like that, but agree with mr .: too little description and what description there is is confused

Wolf
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

I liked it but couldn't they get bigger?

Hivemind
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2

Spelling errors all over the place.
Is is REALLY so hard to use a spell checker. If you're a non-english native speaker, here's a thought: get an english native speaking BE fan to proofread your story...

MrHHH
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 1

Every time you don't use a spell checker, God kills a kitten.

Toymaker
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 1

"Shoulder height" isn't a measurement, and as it's already been pointed out, there's spelling errors aplenty.

It's an ineresting concept, but even as a parody, there was a lot more room for commentary on the subject, and the actual BE is rushed at best.

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