tsunami@xs4all.nl
A boy, his surrogate parents, a nympho in the building across and a mysterious old book ... who said summer was boring ?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.61
- BE: 4.22
- Characters: 4.39
- Technical: 4.28
IamWhoIam
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Ironically its one of those stories where u like it for the story. Not the hottest thing on the market but definitly well written
Stiletto XR13
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
PLEASE LEAVE ME FEEDBACK!!!
If I don't get any, I won't write any!
DarkHeart
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A delightfully twisted and kinky story that was well written, good characterization and was more than just badly written sex scenes. Keep it up.
Skeezy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Better characters than most of the stories I've seen here recently, and the ideas seemed fresh. I'd like to read more about the Marvin.
Daunte
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Really good! I liked the characters and the story both. Your descriptions were well-formed and cohesive too.
My only constructive criticism would have to be that here and there it was hard to follow who was doing what. The grammar was a bit off...in some places you used she/it where a name would have served better.
is not sucking
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Not to sound like faint praise, but this didn't suck. I don't think I've read anything better than this in years from a venue like this.
SomaHolidaye
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Awesome story. Good plot and what not, but I think his second wish if you write another story would be that he becomes an Incubus, and he and Desdemona have fun together...I really liked it wrtie another.
thafrogggg
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great Story. I can't wait for the next chapter. This kind of story is right up my alley
MrHHH
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent story. Interesting characters. Serious BE and sex! This is a complete story and now that the antaginists are out of the way, I'm really interested in what he does next.
DarkPhoenix
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Excellent. Kinky. Fun. Look forward to your next chapter or piece.
Dizzle
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
awesome story. looking forward to the next part
anon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
great story-bring on part 2
Halfelf
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I thought this was one of the best BE stories in quite some time. I enjoyed the "pump" version of the BE. Please keep it up.
buddyu
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I realy liked the story and want to read more.
BateMan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Some of the best I've seen in a very long time. Great pace and balance of power. Total god-like control has gotten way too much ink. Keep it up!
max
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of the best stories i've read in a long time.
rudeypunk
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great twisted story! I love your demented sence of imagination run amock. It might be interesting to see the main character get even more corrupt but that'll will have to be for the next stories.
Benji Dude
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
An excellent story with great characterisation and discriptions but I felt that it was rather long and in some places long-winded.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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