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A story of a girl under a curse, the man that loves, her and all the breast between them. Chapter One in a short series.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.25
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 3.25
- Technical: 2.75
Curvefactory
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Really liked the end of the story, but we need part 2!
humho
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
Daunte
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I thought it was an alright start. A bit light on when it came to the descriptions (of everything from characters to breast growth), it was all left up to the reader to fill in the blanks. I liked the characters more than anything. Flow of the story was good though.
Cmdr_Mark
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Based on one of my favorite comics. I rather liked this take on it.
Prophet Tenebrae
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Let's see - the apperance could easily have been improved, was there really any need for every sentence to be senselessly indented?
Essentially, there is no one serious thing wrong with this story - it just needs more polishing and more depth.
Bejabbers
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
Not familiar with the comic this is based on, didn't do much for me...
rtpoe
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Benji Dude
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
A well rounded story, unfortunatly it needs more fleshing out, the next could be quite interesting.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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