Welcome to the Five-and-Dime Shop, where the Shop Keeper always knows what you need - and a little more up top is almost always the answer. When Jane enters, she finds her relationship gets a little... saucy. (link fixed - sorry)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.83
- BE: 2.17
- Characters: 2.33
- Technical: 2.50
Grey Deth
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
This story definitely fits into the short and sweet category. I do like how both members experienced a transformation, though would have loved more descriptoin of the process and how each was feeling.
DarkHeart
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Not badly written, but definitely too short, and the descriptions were very much lacking.
some guy
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
*yawn* short and to the point, needs more.
DD_Redshoes
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
That pasta sauce works fast and so is the story. Short and to the point is good, but I feel that a bit of fleshing out of the characters and situation would have made this a very compelling story.
Love the Dr Who/ Shop Keeper idea and it could have been really quite funny in other stories.
DD_Redshoes
Benji Dude
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
I don't understand why you just didn't use the SRU universe, there is so much that is the same or very similar. Definatly needed to expand on the BE stuff and maybe a bit more character development.
Juke-box
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Awesome, but short. Also, if it's not SRU it should be different than SRU (it is, but too similar)
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