Aliens give a boy a reality-changing ray gun. Suddenly, he has twin nympho sisters, a gorgeous girl-freind, and a sex slave.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.33
- BE: 4.17
- Characters: 4.33
- Technical: 4.00
ragnaroc
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
One of my favorites. Very naughty. The little girl and the old teacher archtypes, that get it. Don't ya just love corruption?!?
Random Reader
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
One of my favourite stories. Reading as this guy builds up his own private harem, leaving a trail of transformed women in his wake, was truly erotic. Though it seemed at the end we forgot all about Tak'Lon.
Amythyst
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very, very well done. I love the style of writing, just the way everything is worded. Good to see good examples of proper spelling and grammar, even in a story made for guys to beat off to.
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Spotted a few minor grammer mistakes, but otherwise a fairly good and entertaining story. Although IMO your ending was pretty poor: you pretty much pitched away the entire alien angle and just... well... ended it. You really should consider adding more to the story and give it a better ending.
Mr_Nuclear
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Enjoyed it alot, write some more! :-D
rtpoe
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Good idea - having the ray gun seemingly take control of the user and make him want to use it against his better judgement..
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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